Annalinde Louw wonders why this site is so quiet lately :-?

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Calm (21 June 2008) 3 months ago

Calm, calm like the Dead Sea…
I need it calmly to engulf me;
to rush calmly over my head
and calmly drown all the words I’ve ever said.

Turquoise calmness brings a smile to my face
but… when last did calmness inhabit this place?
This place is ablaze with intense, raging fires;
all my most prized ideals go up in flame on the funeral pyres.

Towards this day I have come with nothing; nothing to show…
I embrace this day with all the strength of a newly-born little one.
Perhaps I should have thought to foresee that I should, by now, know
that the battle is hardly begun, and hence, very far from won.

Jul 09, 12:48PM PDT | 1 cheer


Comments:

crystalclear_1 proud to be a grown up haha! ... comment the new poem

hey

ok im getting a tutour hehe I don’t want to be the one that leaves school and loses out of the subject she loves. I love this poem it’s very relaxing and cleansing, I would love to have poetry like this. Could you please comment on my first one it’s quite long but it’s the loss of my uncle cheating on my aunt I would love to hear youre feedback.

I was intrested how in the 9th stanza you change the beat of the poem I can’t explain how the phrasing changes, Do you write poems for a living? and how long have you been writing for ?.xxxx coment back please crystal-clear..xx

Jul 12, 12:12PM PDT | Respond to this

crystalclear_1 proud to be a grown up haha! ... comment the new poem

hey

yes definantly thank you for the correction i don’t think I would of known that otherwise :S.
NO certainly im taking it all in as constructive :D
aww well me the same really It comes to my head and I just write and now im starting too really enjoy it all. Im so glad you have commented mine i DO love youre poetry. Thanks I do like to give the affect of the reader being in that persons shoes and it was a hard time and im glad to be doing it on this website now hehe thats one things off my list of life now anyways haha thankyou. I will defo comment your newest ones and I hope you could check up on mine too haha :D love crystal-clear…xxxx

Jul 15, 01:32PM PDT | Respond to this


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