winkles

I recently was attacked by a crow, and wrote about it in my online journal.

I am really wanting to improve my writing and would like some honest, and constructive critisism. I was never enrolled in an English 12 class and thus never graduated highschool. So be warned that my grammar may be less than perfect. So if there are really obvious grammar mistakes…that could be another thing you could point out, but I’m mostly wanting advice on how to make my writing a better read. I’m not going to edit this story after I read your advice, but I will definitely take it all into consideration, and perhaps change something about how I write in the future. I want to improve, and could use some help from writers. But instead of just being told what is wrong with it, I would also really like to know what I did that worked well, so that I can keep that up and not be totally discouraged. But I can also take some blunt honesty I think. The more detailed your responses, the better. And if you don’t have much time, a quick tip for what desperately needs work, and a few words about what you think I did well would be great. Hopefully there is something you think I did well anyway. And if there is someplace where suddenly you found it really boring or annoying to keep reading please tell me what section in the story that was, and why I lost you there.

Keep in mind that this is 100% non-fiction, and so I was limited by the truth of what really happened to me. Changing the facts just to make it more interesting wasn’t something I wanted to do for this because I wanted to keep it totally real.

Please post your comments on my actual journal if possible, because I check that site far more often than this one and would like to have them there as a reference. If you don’t have a live journal account, you can always post using the anonymous option, and just leave your name and/or your 43 things user name, so I know who you are.

Thank you so much in advanced! I am wanting to read your responses even if you thought it was the most dry and uncreative read you’ve ever encountered. I really just want to get tips on how I can improve my writing, and what I’m already doing right. If any of you want me to critique something you’ve written too, that is around the same length, I would be happy to return the favour at some point.

Here’s the link:

http://users.livejournal.com/_winks/50084.html?mode=reply

the fact that I wrote about the incident later, and felt that the writing process was totally worthwhile. I felt better after writing about it, and I think it made an interesting story. If I hadn’t written about it, the experience definitely would not have been worth it. I’ve taken some satifaction in the fact that I took a completely negative situation, and created something positive from it.

Here is the link to my story:

http://users.livejournal.com/_winks/50084.html?mode=reply

Are all of the people who started this goal quite a while back, still doing the morning pages every day? I am curious as to how they have changed overtime for you guys. How are they different now than they were in the beginning? Or are they very similar, and how so?