Only two coments but I’ll post revised chapters 1-6 cause the others still need work.
The cold Autumn air stung my face as I ran through the woods. Away from the town. I didn’t mean to hurt anyone, it all happened so fast. But I was angry. I was tired with everyone treating me like I was some sort of bomb. Ready to explode. So I ran away from everyone, from the town, and from the gilt. I know it will all catch up with me, but what other choice do I have?
The tears started rolling down my cheeks before I could pull it together.
I stopped running and sat down, leaning against a tree with my face in my hands.
I was crying so hard that I didn’t notice the tall figure that was standing there watching me until I heard him breathing.
My head jerked up. There was still tears in my eyes and everything was blurry. I reached up and wiped my tears away with my jacket sleeve.
As I watched he slowly walked closer.
I stood up to see his face. I gasped. There was no face to see. It was some sort of grayish thing.
Then I looked behind him at the tenicals sprouting from his back.
I blinked to make sure my eyes weren’t playing tricks on me.
He kept walking. Then he stopped right in front of me.
He tilted his head down, watching me?
Suddenly he wrapped his tenicals around me legs and arms. Not hard but just enough to tell me that running is pointless. I couldn’t move anyway.
He kept staring at me.
”You’re not like them are you?”
His voice was deep, strong, and harsh but it was strangely muffled.
”Like who?” I answered looking at him in curiosity and fear, mostly fear.
”Like the humans, your different, your not like them are you?
I looked at him a while before talking.
”No. I am not like them…not at all.”
He took a moment to ponder this then his whole demeanor changed. He was more welcoming, but still threatening.
”I could tell… Now since you’ve admitted your not human I am curious as to what you are.”
I looked at him wondering if he was truly curious or if he was playing dumb. Then slowly I said
”I am a creature unknown to this world…except by a certain few…I am a vampire, but I am special. I’m not like others of my kind.”
Silence passed through the woods. It was as if every animal had stopped what they were doing to watch the scene play out before them.
“I know what you are. I even know how you are different. Even now I can see your wings inside your back. They are ever changing in a cycle. You can chose what your wings will look like…yet you don’t how to fly. I find you interesting because you are abnormal, because you are different, because…”
He leaned down and whispered in my ear.
”...vampires don’t have wings.”
He is not playing dumb. After I didn’t speak, to dumbfounded to even think, he spoke.
”If I am to be honest, I’ve decided to trust you.”
I stared at him. He straightened himself and let me loose. When I didn’t run away he spoke.
”With trust comes responsibility. That responsibility is the secret of my identity. Give me your word and come with me away from here… Which is what I think you were doing anyway, leaving this place?”
I nodded my head still unable to speak. He turned around, facing deeper into the woods then he said over his shoulder
”Try and keep up if you will.”
Then he took off and I followed.
We arrived at a small cabin at dusk. It was built in the heart of the woods, in a clearing, away from everyone. I closed my eyes to listen to the last birds of the day singing their songs. It was peaceful here.
I opened my eyes to take in the scene before me. The setting sun poked above the tree line letting the last bits of daylight streak through the sky. I looked further down to the woods and noticed a small path.
“Where does that lead?”
I said pointing to the path.
“It leads to a cliff with a huge drop to a valley below.”
I nodded and walked over to the door of the cabin while he looked at the sky.
The inside of the cabin was plain there was nothing in it. No furniture or paintings on the wall The cabin was completely empty.
I turned around to look at the man. He was standing there with his backed turned away from me, holding something grayish in his hands. He was wearing a mask.
I walked a few steps out of the house and shut the door.
”A mask, I would have never guessed…and you have blond hair.” I couldn’t help but smile. Even though I was scared I was teasing him about his hair.
“There is a lot you don’t know about me…”
He turned to face me. ”...or about yourself.”
He was almost a man. He looked around 19 or 18 maybe? He had bright green eyes with a little brown.
I crossed my arms and studied his face for any hint of emotion. His face was expressionless as the mask he wore, but his eyes said something else. He was as scared as I was and hoping that I would except him. He was also lonely.
I thought he might be scarred and disfigured, but I was wrong. His face was smooth and pail. Like he wore his mask all the time.
“I don’t believe we have been properly introduced.” he held out his hand and slowly I took it. His hand was strong and sweaty.
“My name is Jared but most people call me Slenderman.”
I shook his hand.
“My name is Marie but most people call me Marry.”
He smiled at me and I smiled back.
”Well Marie it’s nice to meet you. Would you come inside?”
He walked to the door and put his hand on the handle.
“Um I have a question to ask you before we go in…”
He took his hand off the door and walked back over to me.
“Um… Why didn’t you kidnap me like you usually do to people? You just talked to me…”
He smiled again and said
“Well…first I didn’t think you’d trust me if I drug you through the woods. And secondly, because of you differences from others of your kind.” he glanced at my back when he said this.
I nodded my head and said
“Thanks for not dragging me through the woods… Shouldn’t we go inside now?”
He looked around us, at the woods cloaked in shadows. The woods had gone quiet for now.
“Why? Are you afraid of the dark?” he laughed and walked inside.
I walked into the cabin and screamed. Somehow the very empty, small cabin had filled its self up and expanded. There was a small TV and couch to my left and a kitchen to my far, upper right. With a small dining table before the kichen.
I walked around the table and over to the kitchen. The floor was a light colored tile. The cabinets and pantry door were a dark wood. I turned around and went into the living room. The floors were made of the same wood as the cabinets. There was a small colorful rug under the dark gray couch. I noticed a hallway leading to a few doors.
The tiny cabin went from completely empty to a small mansion.
“Pretty sweet huh? There is an enchantment around the cabin so that when I walk in it it will fit to my needs. Like…since their are two of us there are two bedrooms.”
I looked at him then walked down the hallway I noticed earlier, and found both rooms. They were only separated by a wall.
One was definitely bigger than the other. The bigger one had pink blankets.
I walked back over to the main room.
“So… What do you think?”
“I guess I get the bigger room.”
Jared walked back to the bedrooms then came back and sighed.
“I guess you do.”
After a few moments I said “How…did you know about-”
“How did I know about your wings?”
I nodded and he spoke again.
“There is something different about my eyes and the way I…see things I guess. I get impressions of feelings and thoughts…and I can also tell if you’re not…human.”
”Well… That’s different.”
A few more moments of awkward silence then Jared spoke again.
“Why can’t you fly?”
”Uh…well I…really don’t have a flying instructor because…no one like me has wings…”
Jared put his hand on his head and closed his eyes, thinking. After a few moments he spoke.
”You know…I can teach you how to fly.”
”No you can’t. You don’t even have wings just the tentacles coming out of your back.”
Then Jared started chuckling.
”Like I said, earlier you don’t know anything about me.”
Then he took his tentacles and straightened then out like wings. I watched them slowly turn to feathers. At his back they were more white than gray. They slowly faded to a deep black color then faded back to white at the tips. They were as big as he was tall.
I reached out to touch them. They felt like feathers, silky-smooth. I ran my hands over them repeatedly and he shivered.
”We start tomorrow.” and he got up leaving me stand there. I turned around and watch him walk to his room.
“Do you mean flying lessons?”
I leaned over to look down the hallway. His door was shut and he was still laughing, so I went to my new room and closed the door.
I looked around the room and found a closet and a small dresser. The dresser was filled with pants, shorts, socks, etc.
The closet was filled with shirts, and everything was in my size.
By the bed was a small nightstand filled with a hairbrush, a pen and paper, and a toothbrush.
I got under the pink covers, and as I fell asleep I wondered where the bathroom was.
I woke up to the sound of falling water and a singing Jared. I sat up in my comfortable pink bed.
I just sat there for a while then I slowly dragged myself over to my dresser. I pulled out a pair of loose fitting jeans and a pair of purple socks. I put them on then put on a white t-shirt with a yellow smily in the middle that I found in the closet.
I walked out of the room and found another bathroom. It was small but it worked better than no bathroom at all. I went back to my room to get my toothbrush and my hairbrush. Then brushed my teeth and my hair.
When I got out Jared was in the kitchen, with his wings folded up on his back, making breakfast. I sat down at the table and immediately had a stack of pancakes with syrup and butter placed in front of me.
Jared made a second trip with his food, silverware, and two cups one filled with orange juice the other with blood.
I opened my mouth to ask a question but Jared spoke first.
“Deer blood, not human. I wasn’t sure which one you preferred so I went with deer.”
He sat down and smiled at me then dug in to his pancakes.
“Why don’t you use your tentacles to help you carry stuff?”
“I think they have better uses that to help carry breakfast.”
I nodded and took a bite of pancake and instantly fell in love with them.
“These are so good!”
He looked back up at me and said “Well a few years cooking pancakes for myself would make them pretty good.”
I nodded my head again and we finished the rest of are pancakes in silence. After breakfast Jared lead me outside. Jared stretched his wings then looked at me.
“Ok, now you.”
I looked over at him.
“What? Oh my wings.”
I closed my eyes. Then felt a small pinch on my back and felt my wings poke out. Then they fully extended with a small whoosh.
I heard a small intake of breath. Then I opened my eyes and stretched my wings.
They were completely pure white except the tips which were a light baby blue today. From my back to the tips each wing was about the same size as me, maybe a little bigger.”
“I wish I had your wings, they’re beautiful.”
“Thanks…I like your wings too.”
He smiled and said “Ok now you learn to fly!”
“And how am I going to do that?”
“Well, first unfold your wings.”
I unfolded them like he said.
“Then, for the next few minutes your going to flap your wings. Starting out slow then go faster. And I am going to do it with you, so don’t worry.”
I stood there and looked at him.
“Uh… What is the purpose of this?”
“It’s supposed to strengthen your flight muscles.”
I nodded and arched my wings.
For the next few minutes we flapped our wings and by the end of the five minutes I was out of breath and Jared was laughing at me.
“Don’t worry you’ll be able to fly soon enough.”
I nodded my head and sat down on one of the huge rocks by the cabin.
Every day we got up, ate pancakes, and did our wing workout as normal. Jared stopped flapping and folded his wings
“I think you can try to fly for real. As you said yourself the exercises were getting easier.”
I stopped flapping my wings, which I had been flapping for about half an hour with ease.
“I still don’t think I’m ready to fly.”
“Yes you are.”
I shook my head.
“No. I’m not ready.”
“Ok do you want to see if your ready?”
I shrugged my shoulders.
“Get on the rock.”
He pointed to the tallest rock farthest from the cabin. It was maybe twenty feet tall.
I walked over to the base of the rock and looked up at the top.
Jared taped his chin.
“I have a better idea.”
He flapped his wings and flew low and fast toward me. Before I could move out of the way he put his arms around my waist and flew up. He set me on top of the rock and flew back down.
“You have to fly down.”
I leaned over the edge and looked down. Then I pulled back, closed my eyes, and spread my wings open. I stayed like that for a while. I could feel Jared watching me from the ground. Then I jumped off the rock and flapped my wings.
I slowly rose up then I slanted back down and landed back on the ground. I opened my eyes to see where I landed and found Jared walking toward me, smiling.
“Told ya you could fly.”
I shook my head.
“More like falling with style.”
And then we both burst out laughing.
When he caught his breath Jared wiped his eyes holding his stomach.
“You know I’ve never laughed that hard…”
He took a huge breath.
“Come on, I think your done with falling with style.”
He started to walk off to the path that lead into the woods.
I followed him until we stopped the cliff he had mentioned on my first day here.
I looked out at the raising sun, and then I realized what he was going to do and started walking away from the edge.
“Oh no! No! No! No! Definitely not!”
He walked toward me and grabbed my arm, pulling me back to the edge.
“Come on I’m going down with you.”
Then he pushed me off.
“Don’t forget to flap your wings!”
He flew down to my side with his wings barely extended.
“Keep them straight and tilted upward.”
I put out my wings as straight as I could and tilted them up. I slowly started to rise up in a big dip.
I was laughing. I flapped my wings as hard as I could and stopped the curve, I went straight up instead. I leveled out and let myself actually enjoy this flight. I felt the cool wind blow through my feathers and felt it whip my hair back. The view was amazing.
I put out my hands and spun upside down then dived. I almost ran into Jared who was flying in one spot watching me, but at the last minute I swerved. Tilting my wings and flying past him sideways. I slowly glided back down to the cliff. Jared landed a few minutes later out of breath.
“Wow! That was fast! I’ve never seen anyone fly like that!”
I smiled and put my hands on my hips.
”I always knew I could.”
He shook his head.
“Uh… No you said you weren’t ready.”
I smiled again and flapped my wings downward, hard enough to take me a few hundred feet up.
I flew all the way back to the cabin letting the wind guide me.
By the time Jared got back it was almost dark outside.
I was in the living room watching T.V. Jared walked into to his room. Only pausing enough to stop and smile at me before closing his door.
The next morning I woke up to find my sore wings extended underneath me. I got up, got dressed, and brushed my hair and teeth. I walked out to my spot around the table and sat down.
Jared had already set up the table and had started eating. We were eating breakfast of pancakes in silence. Then Jared pointed at me with his fork.
“You Know your actually a pretty good flyer.”
I stopped eating and swallowed my bite of pancakes.
“Thanks…I’m also tired of eating pancakes…Why don’t we eat something else?”
Jared smiled and shook his head.
“Have you looked at our pantry yet?”
I got up and went to the pantry. There was nothing but boxes of pancake mix. Hundreds and hundreds of pancake mix boxes.
I walked over to the cabinets. They were all filled with pancake mix. Except one above the stove that was filled with pans and spatulas.
I walked back to the table and sat down.
“Ok, I see what you mean but…couldn’t we ask the house for something else to eat?”
“Hmmm… I don’t know, let me try something.”
He got up and walked to the pantry. I got up and followed. “Hey house can we have something else to eat…Please?”
Everything was quiet for a while the Jared turned to face me
“I feel kind of stupid now. I mean I talking to my house.”
“It was worth a try-”
All of the sudden something in the house changed. The smell of dust and mildew wafted from the pantry.
Jared reached out his hand to open the pantry and I heard a loud zap. Jared pulled his hand away and it was as if he’d been shocked.
I stood there for a moment while Jared put his hand under some cold water then I reached out to grab the handle.
“No don’t. You’ll get hurt.”
To late. I put my hand on the door handle, but I didn’t get shocked so I turned the handle I opened the door a little, nothing happened so I opened it all the way. The pantry disappeared. In it’s place was a flight of steps, then darkness. Jared held his hand out to me.
“Well shall we go and see what’s down there?”
I stared down into the darkness with a tight feeling in my stomach.
“Um… Right now?”
He put down his hand and said
“Ok, I can feel that you don’t like the dark that much, neither do I. That’s why I learned to do this.”
He cupped his hands around his mouth then blew through the small hole his thumbs made and slowly a green glow shone through his fingers. He opened his hands and there was a small green ball of light in his palm.
“Now you try. Close your hands completely except leave your thumbs open. Like a hand wistle. Then blow and think only of light. To shut it off just cup your hands and close your thumbs. You might not get it at first but-”
I cupped my hands and blew. Suddenly a golden glow shone through my fingers. I opened my hands and there was a small golden light in the palm of my hand.
“Ok I’m ready. Let’s go.”
“It took me a few months to learn how to do that.”
“How many is a few?”
Jared shook his head and walked down the stairs. 1 week ago